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QUOTE: " The harder the conflict, the more glorious the triumph."-Thomas Paine
Through the history of man, we have learned a lot of impressive performance about real human triumph.
Why does it has become a touching story over the generations?
A majority of the people seems to agree that the story shows the pogress of victory that the main character overcome a hardship in many different ways.
While some characters againsted to the enermy whom pressed them from outside, others struggled to the unvisible rivals or even themselves.
Most of us would be emphasized the story because we have been experienced against the conflict which surround us.
The experience reflect them to compare to us.
It is a well-known story.
If someone helps a moth to escape its cocoon, the moth is unlikely to survive after hatched.
Also,during under the extreme weather, such as intense sunlight and a gust of wind, trees bear plentiful fruits.
There are ways to become a winner,no matter how hard you suffered from i
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Through the history of man, we have learned a lot of impressive performance about real human triumph.
>> Through the history of mankind, we have learned a lot of impressive performances about a real human triumph.
Why does it has become a touching story over the generations?
>> Correct!
A majority of the people seems to agree that the story shows the pogress of victory that the main character overcome a hardship in many different ways.
>> A majority of the people seems to agree that the story shows the progress of victory that the main character overcomes a hardship in many different ways.
While some characters againsted to the enermy whom pressed them from outside, others struggled to the unvisible rivals or even themselves.
>> While some characters are against their enemies who tries to put them down, others struggle to an invisible rival or even to themselves.
Most of us would be emphasized the story because we have been experienced against the conflict which surround us.
>> Most of us can understand this situation because most experience to have a conflict with someone or something around us.
The experience reflect them to compare to us.
>> This experiences happened for us to reflect on ourselves.
It is a well-known story.
It is a well-known story.
>> This is a common situation to all.
If someone helps a moth to escape its cocoon, the moth is unlikely to survive after hatched.
>> If someone helps a moth to escape its cocoon, the moth is unlikely to survive after it is hatched.
Also,during under the extreme weather, such as intense sunlight and a gust of wind, trees bear plentiful fruits.
>> Moreover, during an extreme weather like an intense sunlight and a gust of wind, trees bear plenty of fruits.
There are ways to become a winner,no matter how hard you suffered from i
>> There are many ways to become a winner no matter how hard you suffer from a situation.
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