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Question: Do you think someone is a better person after they have been through a challenge? Why? Why not?
Almost all of people hope to become available person.
Some of them try to do their best effot, while others nothing to do.
Althought others have a potential, they do not want to try or give up immediately after begin.
This phenominon is easy to explain, in terms of metacognition(thinking of thinking).
If someone want to overcome one's limitation, he/she need a process to recognize oneself suspectively, called mirroring.
After then, he/she can try to stand it without fear, overcoming it step by step.
Like the process mentioned above, challenge give people a chance to meet another themselves whom stayed deeper inside of thier mind.
Through the hardship, a person can and may grow faster and become a mature peron.
Once you experienced, it never goes out.
Personally, I think challenge is one of the best method to learn about life.
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Almost all of people hope to become available person.
>> Almost all people hope to become an available person.
Some of them try to do their best effot, while others nothing to do.
Some of them try to do their best effot, while others nothing to do.
>> Some of them try to do their best efforts while others aren\'t doing anything at all.
Althought others have a potential, they do not want to try or give up immediately after begin.
Althought others have a potential, they do not want to try or give up immediately after begin.
>> Most people who have potentials do not want to try their best or they tend to give up immediately.
This phenominon is easy to explain, in terms of metacognition(thinking of thinking).
This phenominon is easy to explain, in terms of metacognition(thinking of thinking).
>> This natural phenomenon can be explained by our metacognition.
If someone want to overcome one\'s limitation, he/she need a process to recognize oneself suspectively, called mirroring.
If someone want to overcome one\'s limitation, he/she need a process to recognize oneself suspectively, called mirroring.
>> If someone wants to overcome his limitation then he needs a certain process to recognize himself and this is called mirroring.
After then, he/she can try to stand it without fear, overcoming it step by step.
After then, he/she can try to stand it without fear, overcoming it step by step.
>> After this step then surely he can able to stand up without fear and can overcome it slowly.
Like the process mentioned above, challenge give people a chance to meet another themselves whom stayed deeper inside of thier mind.
Like the process mentioned above, challenge give people a chance to meet another themselves whom stayed deeper inside of thier mind.
>> In relation to this, I can say that challenges give people a chance to find themselves and change for the better.
Through the hardship, a person can and may grow faster and become a mature peron.
Through the hardship, a person can and may grow faster and become a mature peron.
>> Through hardships, people can learn lots of lessons that can help them to become more mature.
Once you experienced, it never goes out.
Once you experienced, it never goes out.
>> Correct!
Personally, I think challenge is one of the best method to learn about life.
Personally, I think challenge is one of the best method to learn about life.
>> Personally, I think that challenges are the best ways for us to learn more about life.
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