*** Essay Writing ***Chance to go to the moon
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If I were given a chance to go to the moon, I would definitely go.
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I like to look at the sky.
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When I have free time, I go outside and enjoy the sunlight of the day.
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And it is the best moment watching the sunset and then I can see many stars and moon at night.
>> And it is the best moment watching the sunset and then seeing the moon and many stars at night.
My cell phone screen is the calendar of moon.(I can check the shape of the moon everyday!)
>> My cellphone\'s wallpaper is the calendar od the moon (I can check the shape of the moon everyday!).
The Universe is always interesting and unknown world to me.
>> The universe is always interesting to me.
If I rode a spaceship, I would like to look at the earth in the universe for a long time.
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And I can step on the backside of moon that I can ever see during my entire life.
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I`ve seen many pictures of the moon and other stars taken by satellites but it will be different with my own eyes.
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Of course I will take pictures of the moon and earth because I would like to keep that memory and share them with many people.
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I am timid but going to the moon is the big opportunity enough to put my all courage.
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