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학생이 쓴 원문
From last year, I have washed used can and plastic pet cleanly and put them into recycling machine. Then it can be changed to points.
I think that It kills two birds with one stone. The points help me buy the something and it helped environmental conservation.
So I'm proud of my hobby.
I'd like to have it continuosly. and I hope that my friends have hobby like it.
It is very excited and useful. !!
강사 첨삭
You could probably convince your friends to do the same thing. You can never go wrong in helping conserve our environment and help out in reducing wastes. Go green!
T. Nica
From last year, I have washed used can and plastic pet cleanly and put them into recycling machine.
>>From last year, I have washed used-cans and plastic bottles cleanly and put them into recycling machines.
Then it can be changed to points.
>>Correct!I think that It kills two birds with one stone.
>>I think that it kills two birds with one stone. (the word \"It\" should be in small letter)
The points help me buy the something and it helped environmental conservation.
>>The points helped me buy something and it helped environmental conservation.So I\'m proud of my hobby.
>>Correct!I\'d like to have it continuosly.
>>I\'d like to continue doing it.
and I hope that my friends have hobby like it.
>>And I hope that my friends will have a hobby like it.It is very excited and useful. !!
>>It is very exciting and useful.
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