Essay2
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After that, I learned about psychology during my two years in high school that I did not lose interest in learning psychology related jargon.
>> After that, I learned about psychology during my two years in high school and I did not lose interest in learning psychology related jargon.
Also, I could find myself interested in cognitive psychology in the psychological theory I learned after school.
>> I also found myself interested in cognitive psychology in the psychological theory I learned after school.
I found out that there are many kinds of abbreviations in our society by working as an NGO in addition to the psychology club.
>> correct!
Among them, I was interested in multi-cultural families. There are already regions in the country where the ratio of international married couples account for four out of 10 couples.
>> correct!
I want to let children who are the multi-cultural couple`s babies `s lives better.
>> I want the children from multi-cultural families to live better lives.
I want to enter the psychology department and expand my knowledge of people by double majoring in Korean literature or philosophy.
>> correct!
In fact, a graduate course is necessary to study psychology properly. This is what my counselor told me when I took a class for introductory psychology.
>> correct!
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