Everyone lives like that.

2011-04-20 · 첨삭 강사 Ella

학생이 쓴 원문

Because of someone who we have to delete in their mind, our future which we can't see and even looks too dark, or the surroundings which don't follow as what we hope, we are suffering from different reasons respectively. We usually express 'Getting old' to 'Eating an age' translated in Korean directly. So I say just a kidding that I'm getting indigestion caused by 'Eating an age too fast'. We sometimes feel the burdens we haven't ever meant. I think my mind is still like teens though my looking is not. Let's get old elegantly as time goes by :) For you cheering up enough. For us making an effort to live.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!

Your composition today is kind of different.

This looks like a poem to me.

You are talking about deep subjects about our emotions.

The way you wrote it seems like you are making a poem.

Though there are sentences that are not.

-Tiny^0^ 

Because of someone who we have to delete in their mind,

>> Because of someone who we have to delete in our mind,

>>(Did you mean, “…we have to delete in our mind,”)
our future which we can't see and even looks too dark,
or the surroundings which don't follow as what we hope, we are suffering from different reasons respectively.

>>correct
We usually express 'Getting old' to 'Eating an age' translated in Korean directly.

>>correct
So I say just a kidding that I'm getting indigestion caused by 'Eating an age too fast'.

>> So I was just kidding when I said that I'm getting indigestion caused by 'Eating an age too fast'.

We sometimes feel the burdens we haven't ever meant.

>>correct
I think my mind is still like teens though my looking is not.

>>correct

>> I think my mind is still like teens though my looks is not.

Let's get old elegantly as time goes by :)

>>correct
For you cheering up enough. For us making an effort to live.

>> For you, cheer up enough and for us make an effort to live.

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