Everything which make me happy.

2019-07-08 · 첨삭 강사 Rosie

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Can you tell about a time when you were happy? Explain your answer. I feel happy when I have a enjoyable time with the people who I love. For example, I\'m happy when my family is happy. I feel good to see the smiles that my mother and father make. And I am happy with having a walk with my pet. I am happy when I hang out with my friends, going a nice restaurants or cafeterias, eating delicious foods. I love eating sweet desserts. When I eat them, I feel happy. Also, when I am with my boyfriend, I feel blissful. A well-made movie can also make me happy. A vast ocean make me blissful, too. I love to play water in the sea. I love riding roller coasters at amusement parks. I also like to go to a water park and play there. I also like to have a time with a person who I love while eating delicious desserts and coffee at a cafe with a view of the sea. I\'m happy when I jog lonely at a sunset evening along the lake park. I love to watch the sunset.I can feel live and free

강사 첨삭

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I feel happy when I have a enjoyable time with the people who I love. 
>> I feel happy when I have an enjoyable time with the people I love.

For example, I\'m happy when my family is happy. 
>> CORRECT

I feel good to see the smiles that my mother and father make.
>> I feel good when I see the smiles that my mother and father make.

And I am happy with having a walk with my pet. 
>> I am also happy when I walk with my pets.

I am happy when I hang out with my friends, going a nice restaurants or cafeterias, eating delicious foods.
>> I am happy when I hang out with my friends, go to nice restaurants or cafeterias, and eating delicious foods.

I love eating sweet desserts. 
>> CORRECT

When I eat them, I feel happy.
>> CORRECT

Also, when I am with my boyfriend, I feel blissful.
>> CORRECT

A well-made movie can also make me happy.
>> CORRECT

A vast ocean make me blissful, too.
>> The vast ocean makes me blissful, too.

I love to play water in the sea.
>> I love playing with water.

I love riding roller coasters at amusement parks. 
>> CORRECT

I also like to go to a water park and play there.
>> CORRECT

I also like to have a time with a person who I love while eating delicious desserts and coffee at a cafe with a view of the sea.
>> I also like to have time with the person I love while eating delicious desserts and drinking coffee at a cafe with a view of the sea.

I\'m happy when I jog lonely at a sunset evening along the lake park.
>> I am happy jogging alone at sunset along the lake park.

I love to watch the sunset.
>> CORRECT

I can feel live and free
>> I can feel alive and free.

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