Except for food, do humans need other animals? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes. Because other animals like a cat, or a dog is good for make a relationship and we can remove the loneliness. Raising animal is good to our satisfaction for mind. And I think most animals are very cute or pretty so that is the reason of to need animals.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon Daisy. ^_^
Thank you for diligently writing an essay. I think you have a heart of gold, especially for animals.
I agree that they are beautiful and they each have a purpose in our ecosystem.
I hope you\'re doing great. See you in class later. ^^
Thank you for diligently writing an essay. I think you have a heart of gold, especially for animals.
I agree that they are beautiful and they each have a purpose in our ecosystem.
I hope you\'re doing great. See you in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry
>> Yes, they do.
Because other animals like a cat, or a dog is good for make a relationship and we can remove the loneliness.
>> It\'s because domestic animals like cats or dogs are good at socializing and help remove loneliness.
Raising animal is good to our satisfaction for mind.
>> Raising an animal is good for our mental health.
And I think most animals are very cute or pretty so that is the reason of to need animals.
>> In addition, I think most animals are very cute or pretty so that is another reason why we need animals.
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