Excessive drinking
학생이 쓴 원문
I think to ban alcohol isn\'t unconditinal methods for reducing crime.
It\'s because withdrawal symptoms can happen more crimes and accidents by not drinking.
So, a good solution is peaple who have alcohol issue realize their problem and decrease the amount of alcohol consumed slowly.
In addition, someone need to take a mental treatment.
Presence that can help peripersonal not drink too much is important.
강사 첨삭
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~~ Teacher Sharon
I think to ban alcohol isn\'t unconditinal methods for reducing crime.
>> I think banning alcohol isn\'t an unconditional method for reducing crime.
It\'s because withdrawal symptoms can happen more crimes and accidents by not drinking.
It\'s because withdrawal symptoms can happen more crimes and accidents by not drinking.
>> This is because withdrawal symptoms can lead to more crimes and accidents.
So, a good solution is peaple who have alcohol issue realize their problem and decrease the amount of alcohol consumed slowly.
So, a good solution is peaple who have alcohol issue realize their problem and decrease the amount of alcohol consumed slowly.
>> So, a good solution is for people who have alcohol issues to realize their problem and slowly decrease the amount of alcohol they consume.
In addition, someone need to take a mental treatment.
In addition, someone need to take a mental treatment.
>> In addition, some people may need mental health treatment.
Presence that can help peripersonal not drink too much is important.
Presence that can help peripersonal not drink too much is important.
>> Having supportive people around to help prevent excessive drinking is important.
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