execution
학생이 쓴 원문
Execution itself is very crual and inhuman.
Even I oppose execution system 10 years ago.
But nowdays my thought changed because inocent victims are increasing.
The punishment of brutal crimes seem seriously light.
Public power has collapsed because pervious governments emphasizd on criminals\'s human right too much.
강사 첨삭
Good day, Ms. [이름]!
I would have to agree with you. In the past, we think that the death penalty in the form of many ways show that our society is cruel, however, as days go by and as crime increases rapidly, I guess having this kind of extreme punishment will let people aware of the consequence of their actions.
Stay well and safe!
Aki~
Execution itself is very crual and inhuman.
>>> The execution itself is very cruel and inhuman.
Even I oppose execution system 10 years ago.
>>> Even I oppose the execution system 10 years ago.
But nowdays my thought changed because inocent victims are increasing.
>>> But nowadays my thought changed because innocent victims are increasing.
The punishment for brutal crimes seems seriously light.
>>> CORRECT!
Public power has collapsed because pervious governments emphasizd on criminals\'s human right too much.
>>> Public power has collapsed because previous governments emphasized criminals\' human right too much.
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