Exemption from military service.
학생이 쓴 원문
Almost every man in Korea hope to be exempted from military service. However in most cases, they can't if they don't have some critical diseases or something.
However, we can find easily someone who get exempted from military service without any proper reasons. Especially, that includes
MC mong(famous singer) who pull out his teeth not to go to the army, 박해진(actor) who falsely insist that get schizophrenia when he was young.
I just think it's very unfair.
This problem is related to "noblesse oblige"
If someone has the ability financially or politically, then he must show good examples to other people.
I think severe punishment will be put on these who try to be exempted from military service without any reasons.
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]!
First of all, I’d like to commend you for being so persevere in this class. You are very determined to learn and I admire you for that. Keep up the good work and always be positive. Furthermore, I like your topic for today. Actually, I’ve had so many questions regarding the military service in Korea. I just wonder if all men really go to the army and what your government does to those who don’t really want to do the service. Anyway, I agree to you. It is so much unfair to everyone if some gives excuses or alibis to exit in their obligation. But anyhow, just do your task and feel proud of yourself because you’re not one of them. You are honest which you could be proud of. Nonetheless, always do good. Have a great weekend [이름] and enjoy your Friday! Keep safe! See you on Tuesday! ^_^T. Abby
Exemption from military service.
>> correct
Almost every man in Korea hope to be exempted from military service.
>> Almost every man in Korea hopes to be exempted from the military service.
However in most cases, they can't if they don't have some critical diseases or something.
>> correctHowever, we can find easily someone who get exempted from military service without any proper reasons.
>> However, we can find someone who gets easily exempted from the military service without any proper/valid reasons.
Especially, that includes MC mong(famous singer) who pull out his teeth not to go to the army, 박해진(actor) who falsely insist that get schizophrenia when he was young. >> That includes now MC Mong, a famous singer who pulled out his teeth just for him not go to to the army, and same with박해진, an actor who fasely insisted that he got Schizophrenia when he was young. I just think it's very unfair.
>> correct
>> I think it’s so unfair.This problem is related to "noblesse oblige"
>> correctIf someone has the ability financially or politically, then he must show good examples to other people.
>> If a person is considered to be an elite, or in a powerful social position, then he must show good examples to other people.
>> If someone is considered as an elite or in a powerful social position, then he must be a good example and a role model to everyone. I think severe punishment will be put on these who try to be exempted from military service without any reasons.
>> I think severe punishment should be put to those who try to be exempted from the military service without any valid reasons.
>> I gues, an extreme punishment should be done to those who try make excuses in entering the military service.
>> I guess, a harsh punishment should be imposed to those who try themselves to be exempted from the military service.
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