Exercise
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Hello Jenny,
Excellent work! Your writing is very good and right on point. You explained clearly why exercise is important, and you added your own example, which makes it even better. Keep it up, you’re doing amazing!
~Teacher Cathy
Exercise is important for our health.
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OR>>Exercise is important for staying healthy.
It makes us strong, gives us energy, and reduces stress.
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OR>>Exercise strengthens the body, increases energy, and reduces stress.
I feel better when I play sports or go for a walk.
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OR>>I feel happier and healthier when I play sports or take a walk.
That is why exercise is good for both the body and the mind.
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OR>>That is why exercise benefits both the body and the mind.
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