Exercise to stay healthy

2017-06-19 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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I walk over 12,000 steps every day. When I go to work, I walk a lot. I walk for about 20 minutes on average. After lunch, I walk about one hour. There are many good ways to walk around the my company. After lunch and taking a walk, I go back at my company around 1 p.m. I start working again. I go to dinner around 6 p.m. After dinner, I walk for more than 30 minutes. I get back my company, sometimes I work a little more and sometimes I just go home. When I have an appointment, I leave the office at 6 p.m. I downloaded apps on my cell phone to measure my steps. I set my goal to walk 12,000 steps and 120 minutes a day. I achieve this goal for five days a week. And I have a lower-body bathing in sauna every other days. I have exercised for more than 30 minutes every day at the fitness center for over a decade. I have never gained weight, but I have lost weight since have a surgical operation. I don't gain weight anymore because I exercise steadily, But I want to gain a little more weight.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!(\",)
Like I said last Friday, we are the exact opposite!(LOL) You love walking and hiking mountains. I barely walk 10 minutes a day and the last time I went hiking was maybe seven years ago. I think you\'ll be able to live until 100 because you are very diligent in following your exercise routine. Now, if you eat a balanced diet and drink less, maybe you\'ll live until you are 150 years old.(\",)
Take care!(\",)
~T. Lynn
I walk over 12,000 steps every day.
>> correct!
When I go to work, I walk a lot.
>> correct!
I walk for about 20 minutes on average.
>> correct!
IS IT>> I walk to work for about 20 minutes.
After lunch, I walk about one hour. There are many good ways to walk around the my company.
>> After lunch, I walk for about one hour. There are many good ways to walk around the company.
After lunch and taking a walk, I go back at my company around 1 p.m. I start working again.
>> After lunch and taking a walk, I go back to my company around 1:00 p.m. then I start working again.
I go to dinner around 6 p.m. After dinner, I walk for more than 30 minutes.
>> I go to dinner around 6:00 p.m. After dinner, I walk for more than 30 minutes.
I get back my company, sometimes I work a little more and sometimes I just go home.
>> After my walk, I go back to my company, sometimes I work a little more and sometimes I just go home.
When I have an appointment, I leave the office at 6:00 p.m.
>> correct!
I downloaded apps on my cell phone to measure my steps.
>> I have downloaded apps on my cellphone to measure my steps.
I set my goal to walk 12,000 steps and 120 minutes a day.
>> correct!
I achieve this goal for five days a week. And I have a lower-body bathing in sauna every other days.
>> I try to achieve this goal five days a week. And I have a lower-body bathing in a sauna every other day.
I have exercised for more than 30 minutes every day at the fitness center for over a decade.
>> I have been exercising for more than 30 minutes every day at the fitness center for over a decade.
I have never gained weight, but I have lost weight since have a surgical operation.
>> I have never gained weight, but I have lost weight since I had a surgical operation.
I don\'t gain weight anymore because I exercise steadily, But I want to gain a little more weight.
>> I don\'t gain weight anymore because I exercise regularly, but I want to gain a little weight.

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