expand your ideas on why you want to be a better person.
학생이 쓴 원문
Since I was a child, I always followed the standard of life. Great score, korean beauty, normal think mechanism and so on. So I’m making the standard of my life for taking a semester off. First of all, I want to become a great speaker of the english language. because it’s a tool to get my dreams. So, I want to be able to discuss about the international issue and I want to guide people on different locations.
Second, I want accomplish my goal. My goal is about instinct. It’s not about How other live, it’s about keeping my thoughts, mind and perspective. I don’t want to go just big cooperation like that, I want to feel satisfaction from taking care of others.
I undecided yet, but I assure that I wilil find what i want to do exactly.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
I am proud of you. Please keep improving yourself.
Since I was a child, I always followed the standard of life.
>> Since I was a kid, I\'ve been following the standards of life.
Great score, korean beauty, normal think mechanism and so on.
>> Great score, Korean beauty and normal way of thinking and the like.
So I’m making the standard of my life for taking a semester off.
>> So I\'m making a better standard for my life while I\'m on semester\'s break.
First of all, I want to become a great speaker of the english language. because it’s a tool to get my dreams.
>> First of all, I want to become a great English speaker because I know that it\'s a tool.
So, I want to be able to discuss about the international issue and I want to guide people on different locations.
>> So I want to be able to discuss more about international issues and I want to guide people in different locations.
Second, I want accomplish my goal.
>> Second, I want to accomplish my goals.
My goal is about instinct.
>> My goal is about instinct.
It’s not about How other live, it’s about keeping my thoughts, mind and perspective.
>> It\'s not about how other live, it\'s about keeping my own thoughts, mind and perspectives.
I don’t want to go just big cooperation like that, I want to feel satisfaction from taking care of others.
>> I don\'t want to contribute more and feel more satisfied in taking care of others.
I undecided yet, but I assure that I wilil find what i want to do exactly.
>> I am not decided yet but I am confident that I will find what I really want to do.
I am proud of you. Please keep improving yourself.
Since I was a child, I always followed the standard of life.
>> Since I was a kid, I\'ve been following the standards of life.
Great score, korean beauty, normal think mechanism and so on.
>> Great score, Korean beauty and normal way of thinking and the like.
So I’m making the standard of my life for taking a semester off.
>> So I\'m making a better standard for my life while I\'m on semester\'s break.
First of all, I want to become a great speaker of the english language. because it’s a tool to get my dreams.
>> First of all, I want to become a great English speaker because I know that it\'s a tool.
So, I want to be able to discuss about the international issue and I want to guide people on different locations.
>> So I want to be able to discuss more about international issues and I want to guide people in different locations.
Second, I want accomplish my goal.
>> Second, I want to accomplish my goals.
My goal is about instinct.
>> My goal is about instinct.
It’s not about How other live, it’s about keeping my thoughts, mind and perspective.
>> It\'s not about how other live, it\'s about keeping my own thoughts, mind and perspectives.
I don’t want to go just big cooperation like that, I want to feel satisfaction from taking care of others.
>> I don\'t want to contribute more and feel more satisfied in taking care of others.
I undecided yet, but I assure that I wilil find what i want to do exactly.
>> I am not decided yet but I am confident that I will find what I really want to do.
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