Explain the bravest moment of your life in no less than 5 sentences

2015-08-25 · 첨삭 강사 Jamie

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In fact, I do not have the bravest moment of my life. If I were a soldier that participate a real war, I would have the bravest moment. However, I have not been faced such a dangerous moment that I should be brave. Supposed that I encounter a mugger, I would fight without hesitation. This is mainly because I am confident in kickboxing. Although I am not tall and big, I am a good fighter. And also, I will take part in a war bravely, if there is a war between South Korea and North Korea. In conclusion, I am a brave man, but I don't have the bravest moment in my life.

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Hello Sung Hoon,   How are you doing? You always impress me on how you construct your sentences. There were only minimal errors and you were able to incorporate more advanced vocabularies into your essay. Good job.   I\'ll see you in class later. Bye.   ~~T. Jamie^^   In fact, I do not have the bravest moment of my life. >> In fact, I still do not have the bravest moment in my life. If I were a soldier that participate a real war, I would have the bravest moment. >> If I were a soldier who participated in a real war, then this experience would be the bravest moment of my life. However, I have not been faced such a dangerous moment that I should be brave. >> However, I haven\'t faced such a dangerous moment that I should have shown such bravery. Supposed that I encounter a mugger, I would fight without hesitation. >> Assumingly that I will encounter a mugger, I would fight against him without any hesitation.This is mainly because I am confident in kickboxing. >> CORRECTAlthough I am not tall and big, I am a good fighter. >> Although I am not tall and big, I am still a good fighter.And also, I will take part in a war bravely, if there is a war between South Korea and North Korea. >> Also, I will take part in a war bravely, if there is a war between North and South Korea. In conclusion, I am a brave man, but I don\'t have the bravest moment in my life. >> CORRECT

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