Extreme Weather
학생이 쓴 원문
Many Korean are proud of having four seasons which gives different taste of beauty. However We could hardly separate our seasons nowadays because of global-warming. especially the middle stage of season like spring or fall is getting similar to summer or winter. it make a feeling that we are taken our seasons by the earth who angry to our behavior and then give a warning. I\'m afraid of not just reducing our seasons but the thinking that it would be just beginning.
강사 첨삭
Hi John!
I can feel your sentiment when you were writing.
Let\'s make our sentences clearer so that you can convey the exact emotion you want.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Many Korean are proud of having four seasons which gives different taste of beauty.
>> Many Koreans are proud of having four seasons which shows different sides of beauty.
However We could hardly separate our seasons nowadays because of global-warming.
>> However, we could hardly tell our seasons apart nowadays because of global warming.
especially the middle stage of season like spring or fall is getting similar to summer or winter.
>> This is especially true in the middle part of spring or fall.
it make a feeling that we are taken our seasons by the earth who angry to our behavior and then give a warning.
>> It gives us a feeling that the earth is giving us a warning because of our behavior towards the environment.
I\'m afraid of not just reducing our seasons but the thinking that it would be just beginning.
>> I\'m afraid that the seasons would grow shorter and shorter and I\'m scared that this is just the beginning.
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