Facebook often gets in trouble for not having very good privacy settings. Do you think that this rea

2017-01-06 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Yes. it could be a big problem. I used Facebook until two year ago. But now I don't use it. Because I saw a article saying "someone suffered a wich-hunt through Facebook, and you could be the one". I was afraid. And I realized that after I enter company, my boss or co-worker can see my privacy. And a person I don't know can do it. when I image that situation, it is terrible. Long time ago, I always thought that I spent lots of time in Facebook. it was wast of time to see Facebook and compare my life with other life. So I decided to quit Facebook. We know SNS is a good way of communication, but we also recognize that it could be a good way of crime, comparing with others and making myself unhappy. And Instead of watching SNS, we should just talk with people who stay beside me and love me.

강사 첨삭

Hi Kim!

Thank you for your opinion! Have a good day and always spend your time wisely!^^

~Kelly^^

Yes. it could be a big problem.

>> Yes. It could be a big problem.

I used Facebook until two year ago.

>> I used Facebook until two years ago.

But now I don\'t use it.

>> Correct

Because I saw a article saying \"someone suffered a wich-hunt through Facebook, and you could be the one\".

I was afraid.

>> Because I read an article saying \"someone suffered a wich-hunt through Facebook, and you could be the one\".

I was afraid.

>> Correct

And I realized that after I enter company, my boss or co-worker can see my privacy.

>> And I realized that after I enter a company, my boss or co-worker can invade my privacy.

And a person I don\'t know can do it.
>> And even a stranger can do it.

when I image that situation, it is terrible. 

>> When I imagine that situation, it feels terrible. 
Long time ago, I always thought that I spent lots of time in Facebook.

>> A long time ago, I always thought that I would spend lots of time on Facebook.

it was wast of time to see Facebook and compare my life with other life. 

>> It was a waste of time to compare my life with others on Facebook.

So I decided to quit Facebook. 

>> So, I decided to quit using Facebook. 
We know SNS is a good way of communication, but we also recognize that it could be a good way of crime, comparing with others and making myself unhappy.

>> We know that SNS is a good way of communication, but we should also recognize it as a method of doing crimes, comparing ourselves with others making us unhappy.

And Instead of watching SNS, we should just talk with people who stay beside me and love me.

>> Instead of spending our time through SNS, we should just talk and be with people we love.

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