Facebook often gets in trouble for not having very good privacy settings. Do you think that this rea
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Hi Kim!
Thank you for your opinion! Have a good day and always spend your time wisely!^^
~Kelly^^
Yes. it could be a big problem.
>> Yes. It could be a big problem.
I used Facebook until two year ago.
>> I used Facebook until two years ago.
But now I don\'t use it.
>> Correct
Because I saw a article saying \"someone suffered a wich-hunt through Facebook, and you could be the one\".
I was afraid.
>> Because I read an article saying \"someone suffered a wich-hunt through Facebook, and you could be the one\".
I was afraid.
>> Correct
And I realized that after I enter company, my boss or co-worker can see my privacy.
>> And I realized that after I enter a company, my boss or co-worker can invade my privacy.
And a person I don\'t know can do it.
>> And even a stranger can do it.
when I image that situation, it is terrible.
>> When I imagine that situation, it feels terrible.
Long time ago, I always thought that I spent lots of time in Facebook.
>> A long time ago, I always thought that I would spend lots of time on Facebook.
it was wast of time to see Facebook and compare my life with other life.
>> It was a waste of time to compare my life with others on Facebook.
So I decided to quit Facebook.
>> So, I decided to quit using Facebook.
We know SNS is a good way of communication, but we also recognize that it could be a good way of crime, comparing with others and making myself unhappy.
>> We know that SNS is a good way of communication, but we should also recognize it as a method of doing crimes, comparing ourselves with others making us unhappy.
And Instead of watching SNS, we should just talk with people who stay beside me and love me.
>> Instead of spending our time through SNS, we should just talk and be with people we love.
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