Facebook often gets in trouble for not having very good privacy settings. Do you think that this rea

2019-11-29 · 첨삭 강사 Louise

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Facebook often gets in trouble for not having very good privacy settings. Do you think that this really is a big problem? Yes, of course it is a problem. As a IT person, I think IT companies should keep an high-security policy, so that users can use without worrying. Also, IMO, there should be a severe punishment when there is an privacy and security related issues.

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Yes, of course it is a problem. 
>> CORRECT

As a IT person, I think IT companies should keep an high-security policy, so that users can use without worrying. 
>> As a person who works in the IT Industry, I think IT companies should keep an high-security policy, so that users can use without worrying. 

Also, IMO, there should be a severe punishment when there is an privacy and security related issues.
>>  Also, in my opinion, there should be severe punishment when there is a privacy and security related issue.

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