Fairytale
학생이 쓴 원문
Theme: [ESSAY] If you were given a chance to change a fairytale, which story would you change and why?
I want to change .
Because in , the new queen misbehave snow white.
I want to change like.....
-When the king married with the new queen, and the new queen is like snow white\'s before mother.
She likes snow white and when her mom(The new queen)died, snow white become the queen and married.
They even had children and lived happily ever after!-
I want to change like this~! : ) ^-^
강사 첨삭
Here\'s your second homework, Clair!
Cheers,
Jean~~
Theme: [ESSAY] If you were given a chance to change a fairytale, which story would you change and why?
I want to change . Because in , the new queen misbehave snow white.
>> I want to change [MOVIE/FAIRYTALE TITLE] because in this story, the new queen attempted to kill Snow White.
I want to change like.....When the king married with the new queen, and the new queen is like snow white\'s before mother.
-When the king married the new queen, I wanted her to treat Snow White like her own daughter.
She likes snow white and when her mom(The new queen)died, snow white become the queen and married.
>> Since the new queen was a good step mother, after she passed away, Snow White became the queen and married her prince.
They even had children and lived happily ever after!-
>> correct
I want to change like this~! : ) ^-^
>> I want to change it like this.
>> or: I want to change it this way.
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