Family

Dear [Name]. [이름],

A marvelous Tuesday to you! ^.^

People really have different answers to the question in the story you shared.

In my case, I have the same answer with the painter.

I certainly believe that family is the most beautiful thing in the world.

Your family always believes in you.

They give you peace when you are troubled.

They also love you unconditionally.

That\'s all for now! ^^

Don\'t forget to see the corrections and suggestions below.

Thanks for the sharing! ^^

See you very soon! ^^,

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

A painter decided to find out the most beautiful things in the world and start to take a journey.

>> A painter decided to find out the most beautiful things in the world and started to take a journey.

>> BETTER: A painter decided to find out the most beautiful thing in the world and started to take a journey.

1. START should be STARTED since you are introducing a past event.

He asked many people about what is the most beautiful things.

>> He asked many people about what the most beautiful things are.

>> BETTER: He asked many people about what the most beautiful thing is.

>> OR: He asked many people, \"What is/are the most beautiful thing/things?\"

2. Check the pattern of your sentence.

SENTENCE PATTERN: ... what + n + v.

QUESTION PATTERN: ... what + v + n?

He asked clergyman about this, and his reply was \"belief\".

>> He asked a clergyman about this, and his reply was \"belief.\"

3. There should be A before CLERGYMAN.

Don\'t forget to use ARTICLES when they are needed.

4. The PERIOD (.) should be placed before the CLOSED APOSTROPHE.

He asked soldier and answer was \"peace\".

>> He asked a soldier and was given an answer which is \"peace.\"

5. Same as number 4.

He asked newlywed again, and they said it was \"love\".

>> And then, he asked a newlywed, and they said it was \"love.\"

6. You can\'t use AGAIN, because the painter didn\'t ask another newlywed.

7. Same as number 4.

The painter was satisfied with their answers and tried to draw all of them, which is mixures of three answers.

>> The painter was satisfied with their answers and tried to draw all of them, which is a mixture of three answers.

>> OR: The painter was satisfied with their answers and tried to draw all of them, which is a combination of three answers.

8. MIXTURE should be A MIXTURE.

He tried to find out the way how to express these by painting but he couldn\'t.

>> He tried to find out the way how to express it by painting, but he couldn\'t.

9. THESE should be IT, because IT is the MIXTURE or COMBINATION of the three answers.

10. There should also be a COMMA before BUT.

At last, he returned home without any drawings.

>> In the end, he returned home without any drawings.

11. AT LAST means after a long time of waiting. Therefore, it can\'t be used in your sentence.

EXAMPLE: At last, I got my license.

He opened the door with being exhaused and saw his children coming to him in the excess of joy.

>> He opened the door with exhaustion and saw his children coming to him with the excess of joy.

>> OR: He opened the door with exhaustion and saw his children approaching him with the excess of joy.

12. It is better to write EXHAUSTION than BEING EXHAUSTED.

He saw the belief in his chilren\'s eye, and said to himself \"Belief is here\".

>> He saw the belief in his children\'s eyes and said to himself, \"Belief is here.\"

13. Be careful on your spelling. You forget to put D in CHILDREN\'S and S in EYES.

14. There should be a COMMA after HIMSELF.

15. The PERIOD (.) should be written before the CLOSED APOSTROPHE.

His wife also welcomed him even though he was far away for a long time, and he saw love from his wife.

>> CORRECT!

>> BETTER: His wife also welcomed him even though he was far away for a long time, and he saw live from her.

He could take a rest at home after a long time and felt peace.  

>> CORRECT!

He finally recognized that the most beautiful things in the world was family

>> He finally recognized that the most beautiful thing in the world was family.

16. THINGS should be THING.

17. You forgot to put a PERIOD at the last part of your sentence.