family gathering
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I like having a family gathering.
Before I went to university, I lived with my parent and my younger brother.
But after I entered university our family usually didn't have time together.
officially, we got a family gathering for someone's birthday and holiday like
a new years day.
My father, brother and I enjoy drinking alcohol so we are trying to have
a dinner together once a month.
After that we usually go bowling or scrren golf.
강사 첨삭
Hi^^
Oh, gathering yeah I love them too. It feels good to join and fellowship with the family once in a while where you share no inhibitions but pure joy and tender laughter^^ I hope you go on reading the sentences below to make a better sentence! Check it out^^
T\'Faye
Yes, I like having a family gathering.
>> CORRECT!Before I went to university, I lived with my parent and my younger brother. But after I entered university our family usually didn\'t have time together.
>> Before I went to the university, I lived with my parents and my younger brother but after that our family didn\'t usually have time together.officially, we got a family gathering for someone\'s birthday and holiday like a new years day.
>> We officially got a family gathering for someone\'s birthday and holidays like New Year\'s Day.My father, brother and I enjoy drinking alcohol so we are trying to have a dinner together once a month.
>> My father, brother and I enjoy drinking alcohol so we are trying to have dinner together once a month.After that we usually go bowling or scrren golf.
>> After that, we usually go bowling or playing golf.
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