Famous place of Seoul
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In Seoul, there are lots of famous places. However, I think Namsan tower is very popular to the foreigners. Also, almost Korean go there in whole of their leaves. I\'ll explain where it is and why it is popular.
This place is located at middle of Seoul. So It became symbol of Seoul. because of this reason, a lot of Korean and foreigners want to go here.
As you can see, the view of Namsan tower is very beautiful. Also it shows about huge development of Korea. So when foreigners visit here, they can feel the most that Korea is quite advanced country.
강사 첨삭
In Seoul, there are lots of famous places.
>> This is a good sentence.
This place is located at middle of Seoul.
As you can see, the view of Namsan tower is very beautiful.
However, I think Namsan tower is very popular to the foreigners.
>> However, I think Namsan Tower is very popular among the foreigners.
Also, almost Korean go there in whole of their leaves.
>> Furthermore, most Koreans have already been there.
I\'ll explain where it is and why it is popular.
>> This is a good sentence.
This place is located at middle of Seoul.
>> This place is located in the center of Seoul.
So It became symbol of Seoul.
>> So it became the symbol of Seoul.
because of this reason, a lot of Korean and foreigners want to go here.
>> Because of this, a lot of Koreans and foreigners want to go here.
As you can see, the view of Namsan tower is very beautiful.
>> As you can see, the view from Namsan Tower is very beautiful.
Also it shows about huge development of Korea.
>> It also shows the huge development in Korea.
So when foreigners visit here, they can feel the most that Korea is quite advanced country.
>> So when foreigners visit here, they can feel that Korea is a quite advanced country.
Thank you sharing these pictures, Daniel. The view is really magnificent!
You were able to share a lot about the tower. Great job!
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