Farming in Korea
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In the past, farming is a very important industry in our country. Most people who live in the countryside engaged in agriculture. They planted and harvested many various crops including rice. Will the products, they could earn their living costs . Also they can provide their children with good education. For them farming meant an indispensable way for living. However, during rapid economic growth and modernization, many farmers left for the big cities. Now we face the lack of labor in most farms. Farming is losing its past glory and prime position.
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In the past, farming is a very important industry in our country.
>> Correct!
OR: Farming was once a very important industry in our country.
Most people who live in the countryside engaged in agriculture.
>> Most people who live in the countryside are engaged in agriculture.
They planted and harvested many various crops including rice.
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OR: They grew and harvested a variety of crops, including rice.
OR: They grew and harvested a variety of crops, including rice.
Will the products, they could earn their living costs .
>> Correct!
>> They could earn enough money with the products to cover their living expenses.
>> They could earn enough money with the products to cover their living expenses.
Also they can provide their children with good education.
>> Correct!
For them farming meant an indispensable way for living.
>> For them, farming meant an indispensable way of life.
However, during rapid economic growth and modernization, many farmers left for the big cities.
>> Correct!
>> However, during periods of rapid economic growth and modernization, many farmers relocated to cities.
>> However, during periods of rapid economic growth and modernization, many farmers relocated to cities.
Now we face the lack of labor in most farms.
>> Now we face a lack of labor on most farms.
Farming is losing its past glory and prime position.
>> Correct!
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