Favorite season

2024-02-19 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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What makes winter your favorite season? I want to do a lot of chllange and many experiance For winter season. We have a lot of things and events in winter season. Chrismas, hallowin, snowing days, new years, Luner new year and my berthday. We always play skietboard, ski, fighting snow, make A snowman for winter season. We can do variety events and things in chrismas And hallowin day.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Sir Ko!

I want to do a lot of chllange and many experiance For winter season.
>>>  I want to do a lot of challenges and many experiences for winter season. 
We have a lot of things and events in winter season.
>>>   correct
Chrismas, hallowin, snowing days, new years, Luner new year and my berthday.
>>> It includes Christmas, Halloween, snowing days, new years, Lunar new year and my birthday.
We always play skietboard, ski, fighting snow, make A snowman for winter season.
>>> We always play skateboarding, skiing, snow fighting, and making a snowman for winter season.   
We can do variety events and things in chrismas And hallowin day.
>>>   We can do variety events and things on Christmas and Halloween day. 
>>>  OR: We can do a variety of events and things on Christmas and Halloween day. 

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