Favorite Weather.

2010-07-09 · 첨삭 강사 JADE

학생이 쓴 원문

My favorite season is fall. I like fall because I like seeing that leaves are falling. and the weather is generally nice. In Korea, Fall is regarded as the season of man I didn't know why So I surfed the internet to find out the reason. There were a lot of guesses about that. and This it the one I like the best. In fall, farmers harvest a crop and they can know whether it is success or failure. and Men believe that the it represents their value. In conclusion, Fall is the time for man to evaluate them

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]! Nice one! Here are your corrections: -Teacher JM

My favorite season is fall.

>>>Correct

I like fall because I like seeing that leaves are falling.

>>>I like fall because I like seeing leaves fall (off from their trees).
and the weather is generally nice.

>>>Correct//The weather is generally nice[start of the sentence right]
In Korea, Fall is regarded as the season of man

>>>Correct//In Korea fall season is regarded as the season for men.
I didn't know why

>>>Correct/
So I surfed the internet to find out the reason.

>>>Correct
There were a lot of guesses about that.

>>>Correct
and This it the one I like the best.

>>>But there was one reason that I like best.

In fall, farmers harvest a crop and they can know whether it is success or failure.

>>>During fall, farmers harvest their crops and with that, they will know whether their harvest is a success or a failure.

and Men believe that the it represents their value.

>>>Men believe that it represents their value.
In conclusion, Fall is the time for man to evaluate them

>>>In conclusion, Fall is the time for man to evaluate themselves.

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