February. 10. 2012.

2012-02-10 · 첨삭 강사 Lara

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I don't usually take a shopping bag. It's unusual for men to take a bag in this city because it still remains in Korean society that predominace of man over woman. So i know that is all over the world's problem. I'm a man so definitely i don't know that matter but i heard this matter from the media and people around me. We must change our mind that's why men or women are the same human. But i'm afraid that i've already knew Korean society that is still remaining this matter. But i'm sure,it will change that in the future. I like myself because it's easy to decide this question for me. But many Korean people don't know themselves, especially young people. Because we have to win or to survive in my country's society. I read a book its the title is suddenly "i can't think of that" I guess, British Book. The book's story line is " study of human" Why we are suffering from depression. The book said " modern people don't know what i am or what i like"

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Hi [이름]!! I totally aprreciate your consistency to learn. Just continue to explore more of you skills. Be mindful about my corrections. Have fun. Stay motivated. Teacher Lara   I don\'t usually take a shopping bag. >> CorrectIt\'s unusual for men to take a bag in this city because it still remains in Korean society that predominace of man over woman. >> CorrectSo i know that is all over the world\'s problem. >> So I know that it\'s one of the world\'s problem.I\'m a man so definitely i don\'t know that matter but i heard this matter from the media and people around me. >> CorrectWe must change our mind that\'s why men or women are the same human. >> We must change our way of thingking that men and women are all the same as humans.But i\'m afraid that i\'ve already knew Korean society that is still remaining this matter. >> But I\'m afraid that this matter will still remain the same in Korean society.But i\'m sure,it will change that in the future.>> But I\'m sure that it\'ll change in the future.I like myself because it\'s easy to decide this question for me. >> I like myself because I can easily decide on this matter alone.But many Korean people don\'t know themselves, especially young people. >> CorrectBecause we have to win or to survive in my country\'s society. >> CorrectI read a book its the title is suddenly \"i can\'t think of that\" >> I read a book entitled \"I can\'t think of that\"I guess, British Book. >> I guess it\'s a British book.The book\'s story line is \" study of human\" >> The book\'s storyline is about study of human.Why we are suffering from depression. >> CorrectThe book said \" modern people don\'t know what i am or what i like\" >> Correct

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