Feburary.10.2012.

2012-02-10 · 첨삭 강사 Liza

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Later,That company went bankrupt and he was recommended another company. He is good at making program such as i made some application programs. But i am a computer illiterate and i am not interested in modern society. Later,His company went bankrupt again. eventually, now he is working in LG researcher. I heard one news from my mother. Older brother is admired by co-workers. Because i know that my brother's attitude. He must make convenient apps for using smart user. Could you tell us about your hometown? I don't know about my hometown. Because i don't like going to another city when i was young. My father likes going to another place there is what i hate. such as He prefers to go camping where is popular places in Korea. Expect for daddy,Our family have not enjoyed going camping, but Nowadays mother is stronger than my father. I don't know why mother bothers daddy but it looks very good situation. So i feel i'm getting older,so i have to listen to my girl's opinion.

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Hi there! Thank you for making your composition! I can see your improvement in our studies. However you should always practice any corrections I make so that you can use all of those in your daily conversations. Continue studying and be inspired with the beauty of learning! Be safe! ^^, T. Lara Later,That company went bankrupt and he was recommended another company. >>Later, the company was bankrupt and he recommended another company.He is good at making program such as i made some application programs. >>He  is good in making programs like me who makes some application programs.But i am a computer illiterate and i am not interested in modern society. >>But, I am not that good in computer and I\'m not interested with the modernized society.Later,His company went bankrupt again. eventually, now he is working in LG researcher. >>Then, his company was bankrupt again. Eventually, he worked in LG as a researcher.I heard one news from my mother. >>I heard some news from my mother.Older brother is admired by co-workers. >>My older is being admired by his co-workers.Because i know that my brother\'s attitude. >>I know my brother\'s attitude and it was the reason.He must make convenient apps for using smart user. >>He must have made some convenient applications for smart user.Could you tell us about your hometown? >>Correct!I don\'t know about my hometown. >>I can\'t say enough about my hometown.Because i don\'t like going to another city when i was young. >>I don\'t like going to another cities when I was young.My father likes going to another place there is what i hate. such as He prefers to go camping where is popular places in Korea. >>My father likes going to another place and that is what I hate because he prefers to go for a camp in places that are popular in Korea.Expect for daddy,Our family have not enjoyed going camping, but Nowadays mother is stronger than my father. >>Unlike Daddy, our family did not enjoy going to camps. But now, my mother is much stronger than my father.I don\'t know why mother bothers daddy but it looks very good situation. >>I don\'t know why my mother bothers Daddy but it seems, it\'s a good situation though.So i feel i\'m getting older,so i have to listen to my girl\'s opinion. >>I\'m getting older so I need to listen to other girl\'s opinion.

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