Feburary.14. 2012.

2012-02-14 · 첨삭 강사 Lara

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Nowadays, i am lost in riding a bicycle. It's fun to ride that,but my girlfriend and my parents don't like that situation because of being in risk. I am not young, but i have to listen to their advice which made me safe and as usual,i must go to a cafe shop with my girl. As for me,I am very fun to go there,because i like perrier water its called sode water. Whenever i drink that, it makes me feel fresh. I feel like good health, i don't know why i feel like that,but i have to double-check my health. we must keep when we are good health. We can enjoy good health. Do you think you are better than most people? Yes.I have a lot of confidence in myself and i know what i like, what i am,But i don't want to explain what i am what i like generally. This calss is a special class normally,i don't want to describe what I am that's why it's not important what i do what i have,but if i tell myself, some people must have some bias againist me. If i speak very well in english, i would not

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Hi [이름]!! I truly appreciate your consistency in sending out your composition. Just keep it up. Make English as a habit. Take care and talk to you soon then. Teacher Lara   Nowadays, i am lost in riding a bicycle. >> Nowadays I got lost in riding a bicycle.It\'s fun to ride that,but my girlfriend and my parents don\'t like that situation because of being in risk. >> It\'s fun to ride that but my girlfriend and my parents don\'t like me to be at risk.I am not young, but i have to listen to their advice which made me safe and as usual,i must go to a cafe shop with my girl. >> I am not young anymore but I have to listen to what they say for my own safety ans as usual I must to a coffee shop with my girlfriend.As for me,I am very fun to go there,because i like perrier water its called sode water. >> As for me I am having fun going there because I like perrier water and they call it soda water.Whenever i drink that, it makes me feel fresh. >> CorrectI feel like good health, i don\'t know why i feel like that,but i have to double-check my health. we must keep when we are good health. >> I feel like I\'m in good health. I don\'t know why I feel that way but I have to double check my condition. We must keep a good health.We can enjoy good health. >> CorrectDo you think you are better than most people? >> CorrectYes.I have a lot of confidence in myself and i know what i like, what i am,But i don\'t want to explain what i am what i like generally. >> CorrectThis calss is a special class normally,i don\'t want to describe what I am that\'s why it\'s not important what i do what i have,but if i tell myself, some people must have some bias againist me. >> CorrectIf i speak very well in english, i would not >> {please complete this sentence}

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