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2010-08-05 · 첨삭 강사 Shy

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As most women do, I also like shopping. But I'm busy so I have little time for shopping. I used to do online shopping. Because it saved time and it was very covenient. Just by clicking a mouse, it was deliverd home. But nowdays, I like better going out for shopping because online shopping products were not satisfied with me. So I make time for going out to shop directly on weekends.

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Hello Ms. [Name]! I have never tried ordering products online because I know that sometimes the picture looks a whole lot different from the actual thing so I don’t want to risk it.. I also prefer shopping in shopping malls.. Though it’s tiring, at least I could fit the clothes and see if they look good on me hehe! See you in class! Shy   As most women do, I also like shopping. >> Correct^^But I'm busy so I have little time for shopping. >> Correct^^I used to do online shopping. >> Correct^^Because it saved time and it was very covenient. >> Because it saved time and it was very convenient.Just by clicking a mouse, it was deliverd home.>> Just by clicking a mouse, it gets delivered to my home.But nowdays, I like better going out for shopping >> But nowadays, I like going out for shopping betterbecause online shopping products were not satisfied with me.>> Because online shopping products were not satisfying for me.So I make time for going out to shop directly on weekends. >> So I make time to go out shopping directly on weekends.

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