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2014-07-29 · 첨삭 강사 Jackie

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Plz explain more(ps, no correction in #11) All the records before thursday were deleted. SO I couldn't check your previous revision. 1 My theme of the thesis was not appropriate. >> My subject for the thesis Why is my original one wrong? 3. I said my subject was appropriate. >> I told him that my subject is appropriate. say, talk I always get confused with these two words.. 4. It turned out to be that he is rude. >> I found out that~ Turn out/ find out 5. You know I didn't think he said the wrong thing. >> I don't think so that he's wrong. ???? 6.academical academic 7. I stayed up all night. >> I didn't sleep last night. 9. I rushed to him. >> I went after him. I went to meet him in a hurry wishing I arrive on time. 10. I was sleepy and dizzy while talking with him. >> I was feeling sleepy and dizzy. (FEELING necessary?) 11. I was quite curious about why my original theme was not appropriate. >>

강사 첨삭

Hi there,[이름]!
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Here are the explanations for the corrections and some alternative sentences.
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~~Teacher Jackie (\",)

Plz explain more(ps, no correction in #11)
>> Please explain more. (P.S. no correction was given for number 11.)
All the records before thursday were deleted.
>> All the records before Thursday were deleted.
OR
>> Records before Thursday were deleted.
SO I couldn\'t check your previous revision.
>> So, I couldn\'t check your previous revisions.
1 My theme of the thesis was not appropriate.
>> The theme for the thesis was not appropriate.
OR
>> My theme for the thesis was inappropriate.
>> My subject for the thesis
>> CORRECT
OR
>> The subject for my thesis
Why is my original one wrong?
>> Why is my original sentence wrong?
OR
>> Why is my sentence wrong?
3. I said my subject was appropriate.
>> I told him my subject was appropriate.
(Since you are quoting what you told your professor.
>> I told him that my subject is appropriate.
>> CORRECT
OR
>> I told him that I have an appropriate theme.
say, talk I always get confused with these two words..
>>Say, talk.I always get confused with these words.
(No need to include two since you enumerated the words.)
4. It turned out to be that he is rude.
>> It turned out is more appropriate to use when referring to
>> I found out that~ Turn out/ find out
>> I found out that,instead of of it turned out
5. You know I didn\'t think he said the wrong thing.
>> CORRECT
OR
>> You know, I didn\'t think that he said the wrong thing.
>> I don\'t think so that he\'s wrong.
>> CORRECT
OR
>>I don\'t think so that his opinion\'s wrong.
6.academical academic
>> (It is more appropriate to use academic)
7. I stayed up all night.
>> I was awake all night.
>> I didn\'t sleep last night.
>> CORRECT
OR
>> I wasn\'t able to sleep last night.
9. I rushed to him. >> I went after him.
>> I rushed towards him.
I went to meet him in a hurry wishing I arrive on time.
>> I went to meet him in a hurry wishing I could catch him.
10. I was sleepy and dizzy while talking with him.
>> I was feeling sleepy and dizzy while talking with him.
>> I was feeling sleepy and dizzy. (FEELING necessary?)
(Feeling is necessary since you are describing the way you feel while talking with the professor.)
11. I was quite curious about why my original theme was not appropriate.
>> CORRECT
OR
>> I was quite curious why my original theme was not appropriate.
OR
>> I was quite curious why my former theme was inappropriate.

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