Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this
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Nowdays, few people spend time to enjoy their hobbies. I believe that the problem is related to some reasons. First of all, I think that because people have to earn money for their future, people have no enough time to devote. For example, my brother also works even for the weekend. Since he has a dream to be an actor, he earns the money for attending an academy that helps him to be an actor. Second, I believe that the covid-19 also has effects on that. To be safe, people should stay their home. This make people not enjoy their hobbies.
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Hi Ji [이름]! Thanks you for your thoughts about this issue.
T. Irene
Nowadays, few people spend time to enjoy their hobbies.
>>> Correct.
I believe that the problem is related to some reasons.
>>> I believe there are some reason to this.
First of all, I think that because people have to earn money for their future, people have no enough time to devote.
>>> First of all, I think that because people have to earn money for their future, people have not enough time to devote for their hobbies.
For example, my brother also works even for the weekend.
>>> For example, my brother also works even on the weekends.
Since he has a dream to be an actor, he earns the money for attending an academy that helps him to be an actor.
>>> Since he has a dream to be an actor, he needs to earn money for attending an academy that will help him to be an actor.
Second, I believe that the covid-19 also has effects on that.
>>> Second, I believe that the covid-19 also had an effect on how people enjoy their hobbies.
To be safe, people should stay their home.
>>> To be safe, people should stay in their homes.
This make people not enjoy their hobbies.
>>> This makes people not enjoy their hobbies.
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