Final remarks of \" Books are better than television
학생이 쓴 원문
I\'m Hana presenting final remarks of \"Books are better than television\". I\'m pleasant to present my own opinion.
First, why I think about that is on lots of example of genius who read vast books. He is Thomas Edi[이름]. I\'m sure that you know about him. According to the Korea Educational Government Sites, Edi[이름] could become brilliant invention master by reading books. As you can see, if you read a lot of books, you can be great man like him.
Second, we can avoid to be a couch potato. By thesis, < A study on Styles and Determinants of Parental Televi[이름] Mediation in Korea> found that Children\'s television consumption and home learning were also found to be significant. Because growth of children is sensitive and important, it\'s necessary for children not to contact harmful things and it will be helpful to avoid a couch potato.
In conclusion, I finish my final remarks to present my opinion to use some reliable examples and thesis. Thank you for reading.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Hannah! This is such a great piece! I like that you provided specific examples and studies to back your opinion. I agree that reading books help the development of children, but so does technology. Let us just be aware or the negative effects of such. Let us talk more again soon. See you!
--Teacher Anji
I\'m Hana presenting final remarks of \"Books are better than television\".
>> I\'m Hana presenting my final remarks of \"Books are better than television\".
I\'m pleasant to present my own opinion.
>> It\'s my pleasure to present my own opinion.
First, why I think about that is on lots of example of genius who read vast books.
>> The first rea[이름] why I think about that are the geniuses who read vast variety of books.
He is Thomas Edi[이름].
>> CORRECT
I\'m sure that you know about him.
>> CORRECT
According to the Korea Educational Government Sites, Edi[이름] could become brilliant invention master by reading books.
>> According to the Korean Educational Government Sites, Edi[이름] was able to become a brilliant invention master by reading books.
As you can see, if you read a lot of books, you can be great man like him.
>> As you can see, if you read a lot of books, you can be a great man like him.
Second, we can avoid to be a couch potato.
>> Second, we can avoid becoming a couch potato.
By thesis, A study on Styles and Determinants of Parental Televi[이름] Mediation in Korea, found that Children\'s television consumption and home learning were also found to be significant.
>> A thesis entitled A study on Styles and Determinants of Parental Television Mediation in Korea, found that children\'s television consumption and home learning were found to be significant.
Because growth of children is sensitive and important, it\'s necessary for children not to contact harmful things and it will be helpful to avoid a couch potato.
>> Because the growth of children is sensitive and important, it\'s necessary for children not to make contact with harmful things and it will be helpful to avoid being a couch potato.
In conclusion, I finish my final remarks to present my opinion to use some reliable examples and thesis. Thank you for reading.
>> In conclusion, I end my remarks to present my opinion to use some reliable examples and thesis. Thank you for reading.
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