Finally,,
학생이 쓴 원문
Finally, I can use my computer in my room!!
wow.
I have a notebook broken so, I wanted to make it useable
However I just wasted my money into it.
I wanted to submit my homework, so I decided to bring my computer from my house which is in my home town.
It has been surplus computer, since I bought computer for my parents.
But that's not mean It is easy to operate this old computer.
It had so a number of viruses that I had to format the computer and re-install the whole programs.
Additionally, connecting internet was the worst mission I ever had.
Any way, I'm very proud of myself to accomplish this mission.
강사 첨삭
Wow [이름]!
You are very resourceful.
I really admire you for wanting to improve your skills.
I hope that these essays and grammar exercises help you a lot.
Always remember, improvement doesn\'t happen in just one day or several times.
It really depends on the person. So keep practicing and bear in mind the corrections.
I know you can do it.
Talk to you soon.
Teacher Nina
>> CORRECT
wow.
wow.
>> CORRECT
I have a notebook broken so, I wanted to make it useable
I have a notebook broken so, I wanted to make it useable
>> I have a notebook that was broken, so I wanted to make it usable again.
>> OR: My net-book was broken, so I wanted to make it useful again.
However I just wasted my money into it.
However I just wasted my money into it.
>> CORRECT
I wanted to submit my homework, so I decided to bring my computer from my house which is in my home town.
I wanted to submit my homework, so I decided to bring my computer from my house which is in my home town.
>> CORRECT
>> OR: I wanted to submit my homework, so I decided to bring my computer from my house to my dormitory.
It has been surplus computer, since I bought computer for my parents.
It has been surplus computer, since I bought computer for my parents.
>> It\'s a second hand computer, since I bought it for my parents.
But that\'s not mean It is easy to operate this old computer.
But that\'s not mean It is easy to operate this old computer.
>> But it doesn\'t mean that it is easy to operate this old computer.
It had so a number of viruses that I had to format the computer and re-install the whole programs.
It had so a number of viruses that I had to format the computer and re-install the whole programs.
>> It has a lot of viruses that I had to format it and re-install many programs.
Additionally, connecting internet was the worst mission I ever had.
Additionally, connecting internet was the worst mission I ever had.
>> In addition, connecting the internet was the worst mission I ever had.
>> OR: In addition, connecting it to the internet was the most difficult part I did.
Any way, I\'m very proud of myself to accomplish this mission.
Any way, I\'m very proud of myself to accomplish this mission.
>> Anyway, I\'m very proud of myself that I accomplished it.
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