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2022-04-20 · 첨삭 강사 Lyn

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I had difficulty expressing myself while I had a job interview on the phone in English. At that time, I had prepared the interview in Korean because I applied for the Korean company only. However, last month, I got a chance to take a job interview in Axxxxxx Korea where the HR team has worked in Singapore. I did not expect that the HR team directly called me in English. It was the most embarrassed situation I had ever experienced in job interview. The most embarrassing thing is that I cannot use my body language. If the interviewer saw my body languages, it would be more effective to convey the meaning. In this experience, I learned the importance of body language during conversations. The suitable body motions can be an effective tool for communicating each other.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sophia. Thank you for doing your homework. I agree with you! We have a hard time expressing ourselves, especially if our interlocutors cannot see us. Using body language is also good for communication. ~T. Lyn

I had difficulty expressing myself while I had a job interview on the phone in English. 

>>Correct. I was having an interview over the phone in English and I had a hard time expressing myself.

At that time, I had prepared the interview in Korean because I applied for the Korean company only.

>>Correct. At that time, I prepared for the interview in Korean since I only applied for a Korean company.

However, last month, I got a chance to take a job interview in Axxxxxx Korea where the HR team has worked in Singapore.

>>Correct. But last month, I had an opportunity to take a job interview at Axxxxxx Korea, where the HR team worked in Singapore.

I did not expect that the HR team directly called me in English. 

>>I didn\'t know that the HR team would call in English directly.

It was the most embarrassed situation I had ever experienced in job interview.
>>It was the most embarrassing situation I\'ve ever experienced in a job interview.
The most embarrassing thing is that I cannot use my body language. 

>>Correct. The most embarrassing thing is not being able to use body language.

If the interviewer saw my body languages, it would be more effective to convey the meaning. 

>>If the interviewer had seen my body language, I would have been able to convey the meaning more effectively.

In this experience, I learned the importance of body language during conversations. 

>>Correct. This experience taught me the importance of body language during conversations.

The suitable body motions can be an effective tool for communicating each other.

>>Proper body movement can be an effective tool for communicating with each other.

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