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Yes, I think men and women show their anger differently.
>> CORRECT!
When men get upset, first, They generally try to endure their anger. but later on, they express their much larger anger in a rage.
>> When men get upset, they try to endure their anger at first but then they later on express their anger in a form of rage.
On the other hand, As women talk to their friends the angry situation, they is decreasing their anger gradually.
>> On the other hand, when woman tell their friends about the situation which made them angry, their anger gradually decreases.
In this case, I think they anger expression is a litter different.
>> Because of this, I think they express their anger a little differently.
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