First, the positive way some people choose to deal with stress is taking a walk.
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First, the positive way some people choose to deal with stress is taking a walk.
By taking a walk, people can think about their troubles, and also choose some creative solution.
Second, the negative way some people choose to deal with stress is eating too much food.
We call it bulimia. Bulimia is bad for their health, and they can feel depressed easily.
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Hi Kara!
By taking a walk, people can think about their troubles, and also choose some creative solution.
We call it bulimia. Bulimia is bad for their health, and they can feel depressed easily.
Coping with stress is one of the hardest things to do.
People with a positive mind do positive things.
On the other hand, some people do negative things.
Andrea
First, the positive way some people choose to deal with stress is taking a walk.
>> First, walking is one of the positive ways people choose to handle stress.
By taking a walk, people can think about their troubles, and also choose some creative solution.
>> By taking a walk, people can think about what troubles them, and also choose some creative solutions.
Second, the negative way some people choose to deal with stress is eating too much food.
>> On the other hand, some people do stress eating to deal with stress.
We call it bulimia. Bulimia is bad for their health, and they can feel depressed easily.
>> We call it bulimia; bulimia is bad for their health, and they can easily feel depressed.
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