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2011-10-24 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

학생이 쓴 원문

i read three times a book that the title is Talmud a week ago. when i was in high school during English class. i really hated English at that time. i went to church since i read the book. i had illusion about church and i went there. first,at the conclusion to describe,Never go there. i had gone church for seven years. i felt alot of things in the church. i went there like mad person, so i was in charge of University Club Boss. i spended day by day,i thought it's the the most dangerous.my university religious assistant changed,when i was 21.he was some weird, he liked girls and had appetite and heavy body. i understood about that, but i thought the man will become minister and speechify it stated my doubt.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름],                Thank you for sharing this story to me. There are some questions I have in my mind. I'll ask you about them in the class. See you! Enjoy your day! -Verna- i read three times a book that the title is Talmud a week ago. >>I read the book entitled 'Talmud' three times a week ago.when i was in high school during English class.i really hated English at that time. >>When I was in high school, I really hated English.I went to church since I read the book. >>Correct >> Since I read that book, I started to go to church.i had illusion about church and i went there. >>I had a dream about the church so I went there.first,at the conclusion to describe,Never go there. >>At first and at the conclusion of the description, it said never go there.i had gone church for seven years. >>I have gone to church for seven years.I felt alot of things in the church. >>Correcti went there like mad person, so i was in charge of University Club Boss. >>Correcti spended day by day,i thought it's the the most dangerous. >>As I spent my days there, i thought it was dangerous.My university religious assistant changed,when i was 21. >>Correcthe was some weird,he liked girls and had appetite and heavy body. >>He was kind of weird. He liked girls and had a good appetite and heavy body.

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