flower shop
학생이 쓴 원문
Yesterday after work, I met my friends.
On my way to restauran, friends are waiting, I bought a bunch of
flowers for a friend, last sunday was her birthday, and a pot of
Ivy, the ranguage of Ivy is lucky love, for another friend.
Even though It was pretty expensive, I felt a lot of pleasure.
I only thought. How glad they will get it!
So as soon as I arrived I gave the present to them.
Well, a friend gave me a moisturizer unexpectedly.
It was manna from heaven to me and to them.
How sweet we are!!
They make my life being valuable.
That's why we have to balance family and friends.
We need both of them absolutely.
강사 첨삭
Hi J!!! Wow!! I think you're a generous friend and they are so lucky to have you. You are right. We always need to balance our time with friends and family, so a little get together during the weekends is something to look forward to. Enjoy life!!!
Lei J
Yesterday after work, I met my friends.>>correct
>>I met my friends after my work yesterday.On my way to restauran, friends are waiting, I bought a bunch of flowers for a friend, last sunday was her birthday,
>>On my way to the restaurant where my friends were waiting, I bought a bunch of flowers for my friend who celebrated her birthday last Sunday.
and a pot of Ivy, the ranguage of Ivy is lucky love, for another friend. >>and a pot of Ivy which means lucky love for another friend.
Even though It was pretty expensive, I felt a lot of pleasure.>>Eventhough it was pretty expensive, I felt a lot of pleasure buying it for them.I only thought. How glad they will get it!>>I just thought how glad they would be if I give it to them.So as soon as I arrived I gave the present to them.>>correctWell, a friend gave me a moisturizer unexpectedly.>>correctIt was manna from heaven to me and to them.>>For us, it was like manna from heaven.How sweet we are!!>>correctThey make my life being valuable.>>They make my life valuable.That's why we have to balance family and friends.>>That's the reason why we need to balance family and friends.
>>That's the reason why we need to balance our time with our family and friends.We need both of them absolutely.
>>correct
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