Focus something on my life.
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the important things in my life are health, work and happiness.
I saw the video on YouTube, he said the person who has succeed dose not become happy, the person who is happy become success. If we are happy the work and health are followed.
So I focus on my happiness and find out what kind of things make me happy.
강사 첨삭
Good day, Thomas!
I could not agree more with every point you made here on your homework answer. What is the point of living if we are not happy? If we live in hell, then, it\'s not living life at all. So, our happiness never depends on our family, friends, or lover. It is something we create within ourselves by cultivating gratitude, compassion, and peace. If we are not happy, we cannot give this to other people. Stay happy even when you break your heart and train yourself to see the silver lining in every dark situation.
Your composition was powerful and moving. I cannot sense that your heart was broken. ^^
Thank you for your effort in sharing you experience and knowing how to be happy.
See you!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
Or: I think the important things in my life are health, work, and happiness.
I saw the video on YouTube, he said the person who has succeed dose not become happy, the person who is happy become success. If we are happy the work and health are followed.
>> I saw a video on YouTube, a man said that the person who succeeds does not become happy, the person who is happy become successful. If we are happy, the work and health are follow.
So I focus on my happiness and find out what kind of things make me happy.
>> Correct!
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