Food shoping

2020-10-19 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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As mentioned in my introduction, I am a working mom. so I usually go to the grocery store on weekends. The most frequent place to go is Hanaro Mart, a 10-minute walk from the house. Hanaro Mart is a mart that sells only domestic products with a nationwide chain. It\'s not a domestic product, it\'s just close, so I go there often. It was renewed in July and it is cleaner and more comfortable than before. On the wall side are mainly refrigerated fresh and frozen foods, and rice, ramen, and kitchen utensils are on the center shelf. My daughter likes to go to the mart so she goes with her. My daughter said it was nice to be able to see live fish and buy some favorite snacks . I usually buy groceries for a week , meats like beef, pork and duck, vegetables like green onions, onions and cabbage, dairy products like milk, yogurt and yoplain, and finally frozen convenience foods like dumplings and pork cutlets for children. My food shopping is usually like this.

강사 첨삭

You did an awesome job [이름]! Please keep in mind all the corrections I made below. ^^
-Teacher Elise

As mentioned in my introduction, I am a working mom. so
>>As mentioned in my introduction, I am a working mom.

I usually go to the grocery store on weekends. The most frequent place to go is Hanaro Mart, a 10-minute walk from the house.
>>CORRECT

Hanaro Mart is a mart that sells only domestic products with a nationwide chain. 
>>CORRECT

It\'s not a domestic product, it\'s just close, so I go there often.
>>CORRECT

It was renewed in July and it is cleaner and more comfortable than before.
>>CORRECT

On the wall side are mainly refrigerated fresh and frozen foods, and rice, ramen, and kitchen utensils are on the center shelf.
>>On the wall side are mainly refrigerated fresh and frozen foods such as rice and ramen. The kitchen utensils are on the center shelf.

My daughter likes to go to the mart so she goes with her.
>> My daughter likes to go to the mart so she goes with me. 

My daughter said it was nice to be able to see live fish and buy some favorite snacks .
>>My daughter said it was nice to be able to see live fishes and buy some of her favorite snacks.

I usually buy groceries for a week , meats like beef, pork and duck, vegetables like green onions, onions and cabbage, dairy products like milk, yogurt and yoplain, and finally frozen convenience foods like dumplings and pork cutlets for children. My food shopping is usually like this.
>>I usually buy groceries that are good for a week. I buy meat like beef, pork and duck. I also buy vegetables like green onions, onions and cabbage. When it comes to dairy products like milk, yogurt and yoplain, I go to the frozen aisle. And finally, I buy frozen convenient foods like dumplings and pork cutlets for my children. I usually shop for food like this. 

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