For Jisun Oral Test 1
학생이 쓴 원문
While I’m learning Unit3, I was able to profoundly realize more who I am. I’m an introvert because I usually have some introverted attributes such as shrinking violet, self-consciousness, and methodicalness. On the verge of, I am oriented that I enjoy my hobby by myself instead of being outgoing. For instance, I enjoy writing in a journal every day. It gives me a chance to get in touch with my innermost self. Through journaling, I am able to find my authentic psyche and what I crave. I also have learned that I am carried away as I grow and see changes. Journaling provides to be groomed for developing a relationship with myself. I have weekly professional counseling to check my innermost self. It’s really helpful to me not to discount my emotional process. Back in Korea, I , who was an associate pastor at a local church, was thinking of myself as an introvert whereas I enjoyed meeting new people and teaching the Bible in large groups.
강사 첨삭
Happy Saturday morning, Han and Jane! I am enjoying reading your thoughts! Looking forward to knowing more about you!-Faith-
While I’m learning Unit3, I was able to profoundly realize more who I am. >> While I’m learning Unit 3, I am able to profoundly realize who I am.
I’m an introvert because I usually have some introverted attributes such as shrinking violet, self-consciousness, and methodicalness.
>> I’m an introvert because I have these following attributes such as being a shrinking violet, self-conscious, and methodical.
On the verge of, I am oriented that I enjoy my hobby by myself instead of being outgoing.
>> In line with this, I am oriented that I enjoy my hobby by myself instead of being outgoing.
For instance, I enjoy writing in a journal every day.
>> For instance, I enjoy writing a journal every day.
It gives me a chance to get in touch with my innermost self.
>> CORRECT
Through journaling, I am able to find my authentic psyche and what I crave.
>> Through journaling, I am able to find my authentic psyche and what I truly desire.
I also have learned that I am carried away as I grow and see changes.
>> I also have learned that I am carried away as I grow up and see changes in my life.
Journaling provides to be groomed for developing a relationship with myself.
>> Journaling grooms me and helps me develop a relationship with myself.
I have weekly professional counseling to check my innermost self.
>> I have a weekly professional counseling to check my innermost self.
It’s really helpful to me not to discount my emotional process.
>> CORRECT
OR Not disregarding my emotional process has made a huge contribution to my stability.
Back in Korea, I , who was an associate pastor at a local church, was thinking of myself as an introvert whereas I enjoyed meeting new people and teaching the Bible in large groups.
>>Back in Korea, I , who was an associate pastor at a local church, was thinking of myself as an introvert, whereas I enjoyed meeting new people and teaching the Bible in large groups.
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