For men who has to serve army
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To reduce the military servers \' concerns, I think the government or military authorities should offer a variety of opportunities to learning and training different jobs or skills. Actually I have seen some young guys finding a new job with their skills learned during military service. A recent TV show program is a good example. In a show, an actor performed his job well as a barber with excellent skills. He learned the cutting skills when he served in the army.
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Hi, Gi [이름]!
I totally agree with you! Gaining skills through learning and training can be very valuable once men return to society after military service. Having these skills can make them feel that their time in the military was worthwhile, as these skills can help them and provide greater job opportunities.
- T. Caitlyn
To reduce the military servers \' concerns, I think the government or military authorities should offer a variety of opportunities to learning and training different jobs or skills.
>> To reduce military service members\' concerns, I think the government or military authorities should offer a variety of opportunities to learn and train for different jobs or skills.
Actually I have seen some young guys finding a new job with their skills learned during military service.
>> CORRECT
A recent TV show program is a good example.
>> CORRECT
In a show, an actor performed his job well as a barber with excellent skills.
>> In a show, an actor performed his job well as a barber, demonstrating excellent skills.
He learned the cutting skills when he served in the army.
>> CORRECT
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