for money
학생이 쓴 원문
It is left side effects in people\'s values in Korea society that the result of too fast rapid economical development in 1970\'s.
That made us think money or economical power is the best thing in our life.
Economical power is the standard for judgement in every parts when young generation choose the job and getting marry and so on.
So according to same judgement they look down on others based on economic status.
I despise such people who has materialism.
강사 첨삭
Ms. [이름]!
This broke my heart, that even in building a relationship, some people use \"economic status\" to form their circle. That\'s why some intelligent people say that we should have the \"heart of a child\"; there is no prejudice in choosing friends, and they easily forgive.
Have a great day!
Aki~
It is left side effects in people\'s values in Korea society that the result of too fast rapid economical development in 1970\'s.
>>> It is the left side effects in people\'s values in Korean society that are the result of too fast and rapid economic development in the 1970s.
That made us think money or economical power is the best thing in our life.
>>> That made us think that money or economic power is the best thing in our lives.
Economical power is the standard for judgement in every parts when young generation choose the job and getting marry and so on.
>>> Economic power is the standard for judgment in every aspect when the young generation chooses a job and gets married, and so on.
So according to same judgement they look down on others based on economic status.
>>> So, according to same judgement they look down on others based on economic status.
I despise such people who has materialism.
>>> I despise such people who have materialism.
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