For my second life
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People are expected to work longer than before to make living because of *the fact that life expectancy is getting longer and longer thanks to medical development. But, if you\'re an employee, someday you have to retire from your job at a certain age according to your company policy. In case you were at the certain age, what is your plan? Or are you still looking for a perfect solution. Nothing there is. *To each his own.
Let me describe my plan *extracted from my bucket list. I specialize in marine safety regulations and I\'ve been working in a port authority for 10 years. But, to be honest, I am getting bored with my job. So I\'m going to study psychology at university. Even though it\'s *outside my area of expertise, I\'ve always been interested in social trends, such as Me Too movement or how to react differently in western and eastern culture. If I learn *fundamental knowledge of psychology, I am sure it helps me to write books about social trends. For my second life.
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Hi there, [이름]!
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Jean~~
People are expected to work longer than before to make living because of *the fact that life expectancy is getting longer and longer thanks to medical development.
>> People are expected to work longer than before to make a living because of *the fact that life expectancy is getting longer and longer thanks to medical development.
But, if you\'re an employee, someday you have to retire from your job at a certain age according to your company policy.
>> or: Having said that, wage earners have to retire from their jobs at a certain age.
In case you were at the certain age, what is your plan?
>> or: When you reached the retirement age, what do you plan do?
Or are you still looking for a perfect solution.
>> Or are you still looking for the perfect retirement plan?
Nothing there is. *To each his own.
>> [I\'m not sure what you mean here.^^]
Let me describe my plan *extracted from my bucket list.
>> Here\'s an extract, which basically describes my plan, from my bucket list.
I specialize in marine safety regulations and I\'ve been working in a port authority for 10 years.
>> correct
But, to be honest, I am getting bored with my job.
>> or: However, I am anything but content with my current situation.
So I\'m going to study psychology at university.
>> or: My boredom and discontent are the driving forces behind my decision to study psychology at university.
Even though it\'s *outside my area of expertise, I\'ve always been interested in social trends, such as Me Too movement or how to react differently in western and eastern culture.
>> correct
If I learn *fundamental knowledge of psychology, I am sure it helps me to write books about social trends. For my second life.
>> If I had the fundamental knowledge of psychology, I am sure it would be a great help to me if I wrote books about social trends. This is for the second half of my life.
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