For you, what is the most dangerous sport?

2022-03-09 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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I am not good at playing sports with a ball because I hurt my ankle 20 years ago while I was riding a snowboard. It was first time for me to ride a snowboard and didn\'t know how to stand up if I fell down. I tried to twist a snowboard but it was not right way to stand. I still have pain on my ankle if I do exercise hardly. I have a fear of skiing, riding snowboard on the snow due to my experience before. It was Beiging winter olympic few weeks ago, we can see a lot of sport games which look dangerous such as sled, ski jump and so on. I believe that winter sports are much more dangerous than summer sports.

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Good day, Sir [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

I am not good at playing sports with a ball because I hurt my ankle 20 years ago while I was riding a snowboard. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I am bad at playing sports with a ball because I hurt my ankle 20 years ago while I was riding a snowboard. 
It was first time for me to ride a snowboard and didn\'t know how to stand up if I fell down. 
>> It was my first time to ride a snowboard and didn\'t know how to stand up if I fall down. 
I tried to twist a snowboard but it was not right way to stand. 
>> I tried to twist a snowboard but it was not the right way to stand. 
I still have pain on my ankle if I do exercise hardly. 
>> CORRECT!
I have a fear of skiing, riding snowboard on the snow due to my experience before. 
>> I have a fear of skiing and riding a snowboard due to my experience before. 
OR >> >> I am afraid of skiing and riding a snowboard due to my experience before. 
It was Beiging winter olympic few weeks ago, we can see a lot of sport games which look dangerous such as sled, ski jump and so on. 
>> It was Beijing Winter Olympics a few weeks ago, we can see a lot of sport games which look dangerous such as sled, ski jump and so on. 
I believe that winter sports are much more dangerous than summer sports.
>> CORRECT!

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