For you, what is the most fulfilling career? Explain your answer.
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I think it was when I dived off of that diving pole.
I went to that beach when I first came to Australia and it was great :)
It was crowded but it was okay.
And I really wanted to try the diving pole.
It was about 6ms long so I was kinda scared first time.
But when I tried it, It felt like it was the thriliing moment of my life :D
So I tried 3 times and every time it was less scairer.
I wish I can visit before I go to Korea. :3
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Hello [이름],
Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you.
Keep up the good work!
Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)
For you, what is the most fulfilling career? Explain your answer.
I think it was when I dived off of that diving pole.
>>> CORRECT
I went to that beach when I first came to Australia and it was great.
>>> CORRECT
It was crowded but it was okay.
>>> CORRECT
And I really wanted to try the diving pole.
>>> CORRECT
It was about 6ms long so I was kinda scared first time.
>>> It was about 6ms long so I was kinda scared the first time.
But when I tried it, It felt like it was the thriliing moment of my life :D
>>> But when I tried it, it felt like it was the most thrilling moment of my life.
So I tried 3 times and every time it was less scairer.
>>> So I tried it for three times and every time it was less scary.
I wish I can visit before I go to Korea.
>>> CORRECT
OR: I wish I can visit again before I go back to Korea.
*NOTE: [이름] I just check these sentences but the question is what career not sports. Okay!
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