For you, what makes one person more attractive than another?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think personality can make one person more attractive than others. Let\'s think about a beautiful woman with bad personality. She has a short fuse and a foul mouth. How can you say that she is beautiful? Never!
Let me put it another way. Let\'s think about a ugly woman. However, she has class and is so easy going that she is popular. She has a magnetic personality. I would say an ugly woman with good personality is more attractive than a gorgeous woman with bad temper.
Besides personality, a good appearance could make one person more attractive. Outer appearance is sure to be a striking point that we usually remember about others. Maintaining and improving our appearance is a good way to make ourselves more attractive. Therefore, I see many businessmen getting dressed when they meet customers to enhance their impressions which can help lead to successful businesses.
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Happy Friday, Steve! ^^,)
\"Beauty is subjective and should not be limited to only what we see on the outside.\"
I definitely agree with you opinion, Steve. Thank you for answering you homework.
I have made some modifications. If you have queries, we can discuss them later in class.
Enjoy the rest of your day!
__Teacher Mayleen :)
I think personality can make one person more attractive than others.
>>> CORRECT
Let\'s think about a beautiful woman with bad personality.
>>> Let\'s think about a beautiful woman with a bad personality.
She has a short fuse and a foul mouth.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: She has a quick temper and an unpleasant tongue.
How can you say that she is beautiful? Never!
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: How is it possible to call her beautiful? Never!
Let me put it another way. Let\'s think about a ugly woman.
>>> Let me put it another way. Let\'s think about an ugly woman.
However, she has class and is so easy going that she is popular.
>>> CORRECT [However, she has class and is so easy-going that she is popular.]
She has a magnetic personality.
>>> CORRECT
I would say an ugly woman with good personality is more attractive than a gorgeous woman with bad temper.
>>> I would say an ugly woman with a good personality is more attractive than a gorgeous woman with a bad temper.
Besides personality, a good appearance could make one person more attractive.
>>> Besides personality, a good appearance could make a person more attractive.
Outer appearance is sure to be a striking point that we usually remember about others.
>>> The outer appearance is sure to be a striking point that we usually remember about others.
Maintaining and improving our appearance is a good way to make ourselves more attractive.
>>> CORRECT
Therefore, I see many businessmen getting dressed when they meet customers to enhance their impressions which can help lead to successful businesses.
>>> Therefore, I see many businessmen getting dressed when they meet customers to enhance their impressions, which can help lead to successful business.
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