Foreign country
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Actually I am happy now and I don\'t regret the past because I had what I want to do or learn. Dare I say, I want to go back 10. At then, I started to learn dancing. I was thinking to learn dancing or figure skating. I think I was little afraid to learn skating, so I chose dancing. But now I think if I have learned skating, I can do better than now.
4. tourism who visit our country is really important. It helps many things on my country, because they can develop our economic growth, they are going to be know our cultures. When I go abroad, international people are likely to know our country then it will be very thankful.
5. In terms of services, that became more detail. Since many people are going to see our cultures, there are various services like experiences or where we can enjoy. Although environment is not good that much. The more people come there, environment is getting bad.
강사 첨삭
Actually I am happy now and I don\'t regret the past because I had what I want to do or learn.
>> Correct.
Dare I say, I want to go back 10.
>> Dare I say, I want to go back to when I was 10.
At then, I started to learn dancing.
>> During that time, I started to learn dancing.
I was thinking to learn dancing or figure skating.
>> I was thinking about learning dancing or figure skating.
I think I was little afraid to learn skating, so I chose dancing.
>> I think I was a little afraid to learn skating, so I chose dancing.
But now I think if I have learned skating, I can do better than now.
4. tourism who visit our country is really important.
>> But now that I think of it, if I have learned skating, I can may be really good by now.
>> Tourists who visit our country are really important.
It helps many things on my country, because they can develop our economic growth, they are going to be know our cultures.
>> It helps a lot of area in my country since they get to know about our culture and it helps improve our economy.
When I go abroad, international people are likely to know our country then it will be very thankful.
5. In terms of services, that became more detail.
>> When I go abroad, people there are likely to know about our country. I feel thankful for that.
>> In terms of services, it becomes more detailed.
Since many people are going to see our cultures, there are various services like experiences or where we can enjoy.
>> Since many people are coming to see our culture, there are various services and experiences that we can have.
Although environment is not good that much.
>> Although our environment is not as good as it was before.
The more people come there, environment is getting bad.
>> The more people visits my country, the more the environment get\'s worse.
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