Foreign tourists must be charged higher fees than local people to visit cultural places and historic

2017-07-24 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Nowadays, many people are willing to spend their money on travelling abroad. However there are places where tourists pay more fees than local people, so it is controversial whether this situation is desirable. In my opinion, I disagree with the topic. High cost is likely to cause a decrease in the number of tourists. Most travelers are disappointed in countries where they visit because of the unfair policy. According to a survey, people who have a bad memory in a nation do not want to go the same place. This situation makes the nations’ income reduce. Therefore, I think charged fees should be lower than local people rather. Many visitors can have a chance to go more cultural and historical sites.

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Nowadays, many people are willing to spend their money on travelling abroad.

>>CORRECT!

 However there are places where tourists pay more fees than local people, so it is controversial whether this situation is desirable.

>>However, there are places where tourists pay more fees than local people, so it is controversial whether this situation is desirable.
 In my opinion, I disagree with the topic.

>>CORRECT!

High cost is likely to cause a decrease in the number of tourists.

>>CORRECT!

Most travelers are disappointed in countries where they visit because of the unfair policy.

>>CORRECT!

According to a survey, people who have a bad memory in a nation do not want to go the same place.

>>CORRECT!

This situation makes the nations’ income reduce.

>>CORRECT!
 Therefore, I think charged fees should be lower than local people rather.

>>CORRECT!

Many visitors can have a chance to go more cultural and historical sites.

>>CORRECT!


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