foundation of marriage

2020-09-21 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

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Marriage is not everything that looks like it. Even though, they loved each other at first sight, and they loved each other passionately The first feeling I felt is gone in only three years. So what do we need to get the foundation to collapse? It`s hard to conclude with just one thing. In my case, trust in each other is the most important. Marriage is a reality, we can`t just live with love. Financial problems, child-rearing, and not being able to live comfortably alone........ Beyond the feelings of love, the other person`s sincere and warm heart. These things are more important To all young men and women. When they are in trouble, they want to be the only one who`s on their side and who wates for them. . The only person who be on their side when they tired and tird

강사 첨삭

Good day Mrs. [Name]! Thank you for doing your homework. You did a wonderful job. Keep it up as always. See you in class! Have a great day!

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Marriage is not everything that looks like it.
>> Marriage is not everything that it looks like.

Even though, they loved each other at first sight, and they loved each other passionately
>> Even though they love each other on sight and looks like a passionate love... (there should be continuing phrase)

The first feeling I felt is gone in only three years.
>> The first feeling I felt is gone only after three years of marriage.

So what do we need to get the foundation to collapse?
>> So, what does it take to let the foundation not to collapse?
It`s hard to conclude with just one thing.
>> CORRECT

In my case, trust in each other is the most important.
>> CORRECT

Marriage is a reality, we can`t just live with love.
>> Marriage in reality is hard, we can\'t just live with love.

Financial problems, child-rearing, and not being able to live comfortably alone........
>> Also, financial problems, child-rearing, and not being able to live alone comfortable.

Beyond the feelings of love, the other person`s sincere and warm heart. These things are more important To all young men and women.
>> Aside from love, sincere and warm heart are also important.

When they are in trouble, they want to be the only one who`s on their side and who wates for them..
>> When they are in trouble, they want their partner to be on their side and waits for them.

The only person who be on their side when they tired and tird
>> And they\'re the only one on their side when they\'re tired.

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